New Collect

Here's a collect 'what I wrote' (!) for the 1st Sunday after Trinity, and below that the original from Common Worship which I tussled with to produce the variation. I'm sure it changes things, and gives the creation a look in. I'm not sure if its weaknesses are greater than its strength. All the same the notes and commentary I've written for this and the 26 other prayers have given me chance to think through a few things and get me thinking about theology and prayer.

God of all good things,
it is your strength that sustains us
and your love which spins the globe,
we long to serve your purposes here on earth
and pray that by your mercy you would enable us
to put our wills in the orbit of your love
so we may live as you have commanded us,
through Jesus Christ our Lord,
who is alives and reigns with you
in the unity of the Holy Spirit,
one God, now and for ever.

original Collect
O God,
the strength of all those who put their trust in you,
mercifully accept our prayers
and, because through the weakness of our mortal nature
we can do no good thing without you,
grant us the help of your grace,
that in the keeping of your commandments
we may please you both in will and deed;
through Jesus Christ your Son our Lord,
who is alive and reigns with you,
in the unity of the Holy Spirit,
one God, now and for ever.